I can see where i might need some work. I should've put more details about my grandpa and our relationship, just like you suggested. I also could've added things to describe his funeral and what i did to help with the preparation. I know that my organization, sentence fluency, word choice, and ideas were kind of on the weak side. I'll be sure to work on these traits throughout the year.
-Sharmaine Sebastian
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